Friday, March 8, 2013

A Stone's Throw

Frustrat-
ion
From no cooperat-
ion
A continuing obligat-
ion
Of your business
A lodestone
That's never unloaded
The end may be
A stone's throw
Away
But the wait
Holds you down
Nose to the grindstone

This is thanks to De from Whimsygizmo, who suggested that I might "rock" this prompt from Trifecta http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/ (making a little pun there, De?) ;-)  Also sharing this (Sunday) with a place that I definitely share some chemistry Poets United poetryblogroll.blogspot.com  The prompt is to write a 33 word poem using the word "stone" they chose stone from the third element in the periodic table "Lithium," hence my fun with the word "ion."  Unfortunately, based on true frustration--we have our own business, my husband's been out of town for 4 days and right when he landed and was about to come home, (where I was waiting with wine and hopes of relaxing outside) crisis struck and he had to go to the office--sigh.  However, there's always a bright side, I had time to write a poem! :-) P.S. Sunday, got my wine, hubby and sunset fix (not necessarily in that order...)

57 comments:

  1. I like your 'ions'! De was right - you wrote the challenge well! Welcome to Trifecta :)

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    1. Hi Janna! Thank you very much, enjoyed this prompt and looking forward trying out some more :-)

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  2. It's always the wait ... well said !!

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    1. Hi Speck! Thank you very much, enjoyed playing with that and the "stone."

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    1. Hi Joe!! Thank you very much :-)

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  4. I totally think you ROCKED the prompt! It's hard to be a rock... or between a rock and a hard place... or always feeling a stone's throw away. :)

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    1. Hi Rachel!! You are so delightful--thank you so much for the enthusiasm. You made my day :-) Love your wordplay!

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  5. What a great debut entry:-)Welcome to Trifecta & I really enjoyed your word play as well as the "P.S."-hope you got to relax a little with your hubby once he returned:-)

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    1. Hi! Wow, you folks really know how to make a person feel welcome-Thank you!! And we did get to relax together, he actually came home about 10 minutes after I finished the poem :-)

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  6. Hey Hi! Wow... you're a lot of stuff. Liked your poem.

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    1. Hi Ted!! Yep, I like variety :-) Thank you for the visit--looking forward to reading your poem!

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  7. It's very clever and witty, while getting the message across clearly.

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    1. Hi Rosemary!! Nice to see you again, thank you very much that's a perfect compliment.

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  8. can feel your disappointment but i like that you can also see the positive, even though an evening with wine and hubs would've been better than writing a poem..right..? smiles

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    1. Hi Claudia! Thought you might empathize, in the missing the hubs and wine :-) Tonight is another beautiful day and I've been promised a sunset on the patio, it all works out

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  9. I read that comment, where she was encouraging you to try us out, and I was hoping you would. And now I'm glad you did. Welcome aboard. Thanks for linking this. My husband is a teacher, so we don't get a ton of late nights at the office. Except for parent teacher conferences. Damn conferences. :-)

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    1. Hi! Thank you so much. My parents were both teachers and I know that life well. Might not have late nights at the office, but there's always homework. And those conferences--yep...:-)

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    1. Hi Gail!! Really appreciate the visit and kinds words :-)

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  11. You managed well with this piece despite your frustrating days! (:

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    1. Hi Draug!! Really appreciate that--sometimes it's the challenges that make your poetry humm. :-)

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  12. Hate to say I told ya so, but see? Rocked it!
    Looooooove all those ions. You clever girl. :)
    I'll take more Sara in all my cyber-poetry worlds, ANY day! Yay!

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    1. De!! You are such an inspiration and your enthusiasm always moves me to stretch just a little more--thank you very, very much--you have no idea how much it means <3 Thank you :-)

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    1. Hi Bo!! Welcome--your kind words are very much appreciated :-)

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  14. Sara, loved every "ion" of this poem, clever girl. Some of my favorite poems are those slices of life... like you waiting for your hub to come back. Brian Miller has that knack as well! Great read... peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/03/09/stone-cold-trifecta/

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    1. Hi Amy!! Very clever comment :-) And to say I'm anything like Brian is a huge compliment, he is one of my fav poets. Thank you very much

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  15. You proved that frustration can create some good poetry! Glad you finally got the hubby+wine+sunset!

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    1. Hi Jennifer!! Funny how strong emotions can really get that muse in gear :-) It was very nice to finally get that quiet time.

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  16. Started swaying to the rap beat. Nice debut!

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    1. Hi Kymm!! Thank you very much for the visit. Didn't even think of it that way, though I do love to write with a rhythm :-) So glad you were swaying :-)

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  17. Catchy and clever. Like it very much.

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    1. Hi Dave!! So nice to see you, and glad you enjoyed the poem. Looking forward to reading yours soon :-)

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  18. Well done! Loved the internal rhyme & the ending was wonderful. The weight does hold a person down, nose to the grindstone!

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    1. Hi Mary!! Thank you for all your kind words. The ending only came about because I needed 33 words. Otherwise I would have ended it sooner. Love how these prompts stretch me :-)

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  19. I love this poem~
    And I am so feeling the frustration!
    My hubby retires from the Navy in eleven days~
    My Muse and him argue about creative time-I will be reminded of this poem as I dance around trying to make time~ :D

    Happy it all worked out-all about the dance, lol

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    1. Hi Ella!! So wonderful to see you :-) I have missed you at PU. Finding creative time is definitely a dance. You deserve the time. Congratulations on hubby's retirement.
      Thank you for sharing a laugh and a smile with me <3

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  20. I can identify with this. Glad you got your fix!
    Here is my offering: http://mcguffysreader.blogspot.com/2013/03/womens-day.html

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    1. Hi Ann!! Welcome :-) Me too! Really enjoyed my visit to your blog.

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  21. This was a fun read... despite the frustration that prompted it's inception. Thank goodness you were rewarded, in the end!

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    1. Hi Kim! So glad you enjoyed it. Yes, ultimately a very happy ending :-)

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  22. Glad Sunday went better :) Like your structure here. Cleverly done Sara.

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    1. Hi David!! Me too :-) Thank you for the good wishes and kind compliment

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  23. Like the word and line breaks ~ I hope the frustration will eventually turn into jubilation with wine and the hubby ~

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    1. Hi Grace!! Thank you for the good wishes-love that turn of phrase with the ion ending-and yes, finally jubilation :-)

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  24. I loved the poem and the commentary after as well

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    1. Hi Kodjo! Nice to see you again---Thank you! So glad you enjoyed the poem :-)

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  25. Lots of fun in the line-breaks with their double meaning. Your commentary throws the whole piece into a new light. Glad you can find space to write even in the middle of so much chaos!

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    1. Andrew!! So happy to see you :-) Thank you for the compliment!

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  26. woot...sounds like sunday was a good day for you...very cool line breaks, like ee cummings...oy and def the frustrations of the office as well...been there...i used to travel for work and those unexpected delays always frustrated....

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    1. Hi Brian!! Yea, Sundays are usually good days :-) Comparing me to ee is high praise, Thank you!! And, glad you're not traveling for work anymore, I used to do that too--ugh

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  27. Superbly done. Had me riveted.

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    1. Hi Dave!! What a wonderful compliment-thank you very much :-)

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  28. As always, the imagery is top notch! Though this is my first comment, I often make it to your blog after reading what's new on Rhyme Me A Smile, and I am always impressed!

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  29. Hi M.!! Welcome :-) and Wow!!! Thank you very much, your comment completely made my day!

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    1. Would you mind if put a link to your site in the sidebar of my blog?

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