Frustrat-
ion
From no cooperat-
ion
A continuing obligat-
ion
Of your business
A lodestone
That's never unloaded
The end may be
A stone's throw
Away
But the wait
Holds you down
Nose to the grindstone
This is thanks to De from Whimsygizmo, who suggested that I might "rock" this prompt from Trifecta http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/ (making a little pun there, De?) ;-) Also sharing this (Sunday) with a place that I definitely share some chemistry Poets United poetryblogroll.blogspot.com The prompt is to write a 33 word poem using the word "stone" they chose stone from the third element in the periodic table "Lithium," hence my fun with the word "ion." Unfortunately, based on true frustration--we have our own business, my husband's been out of town for 4 days and right when he landed and was about to come home, (where I was waiting with wine and hopes of relaxing outside) crisis struck and he had to go to the office--sigh. However, there's always a bright side, I had time to write a poem! :-) P.S. Sunday, got my wine, hubby and sunset fix (not necessarily in that order...)
I like your 'ions'! De was right - you wrote the challenge well! Welcome to Trifecta :)
ReplyDeleteHi Janna! Thank you very much, enjoyed this prompt and looking forward trying out some more :-)
DeleteIt's always the wait ... well said !!
ReplyDeleteHi Speck! Thank you very much, enjoyed playing with that and the "stone."
DeleteWelcome to Trifecta!
ReplyDeleteHi Joe!! Thank you very much :-)
DeleteI totally think you ROCKED the prompt! It's hard to be a rock... or between a rock and a hard place... or always feeling a stone's throw away. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rachel!! You are so delightful--thank you so much for the enthusiasm. You made my day :-) Love your wordplay!
DeleteWhat a great debut entry:-)Welcome to Trifecta & I really enjoyed your word play as well as the "P.S."-hope you got to relax a little with your hubby once he returned:-)
ReplyDeleteHi! Wow, you folks really know how to make a person feel welcome-Thank you!! And we did get to relax together, he actually came home about 10 minutes after I finished the poem :-)
DeleteHey Hi! Wow... you're a lot of stuff. Liked your poem.
ReplyDeleteHi Ted!! Yep, I like variety :-) Thank you for the visit--looking forward to reading your poem!
DeleteIt's very clever and witty, while getting the message across clearly.
ReplyDeleteHi Rosemary!! Nice to see you again, thank you very much that's a perfect compliment.
Deletecan feel your disappointment but i like that you can also see the positive, even though an evening with wine and hubs would've been better than writing a poem..right..? smiles
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! Thought you might empathize, in the missing the hubs and wine :-) Tonight is another beautiful day and I've been promised a sunset on the patio, it all works out
DeleteI read that comment, where she was encouraging you to try us out, and I was hoping you would. And now I'm glad you did. Welcome aboard. Thanks for linking this. My husband is a teacher, so we don't get a ton of late nights at the office. Except for parent teacher conferences. Damn conferences. :-)
ReplyDeleteHi! Thank you so much. My parents were both teachers and I know that life well. Might not have late nights at the office, but there's always homework. And those conferences--yep...:-)
DeleteYou managed well with this piece despite your frustrating days! (:
ReplyDeleteHi Draug!! Really appreciate that--sometimes it's the challenges that make your poetry humm. :-)
DeleteHate to say I told ya so, but see? Rocked it!
ReplyDeleteLooooooove all those ions. You clever girl. :)
I'll take more Sara in all my cyber-poetry worlds, ANY day! Yay!
De!! You are such an inspiration and your enthusiasm always moves me to stretch just a little more--thank you very, very much--you have no idea how much it means <3 Thank you :-)
DeleteHi Gail!! Really appreciate the visit and kinds words :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Bo!! Welcome--your kind words are very much appreciated :-)
ReplyDeleteSara, loved every "ion" of this poem, clever girl. Some of my favorite poems are those slices of life... like you waiting for your hub to come back. Brian Miller has that knack as well! Great read... peace, Amy
ReplyDeletehttp://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/03/09/stone-cold-trifecta/
Hi Amy!! Very clever comment :-) And to say I'm anything like Brian is a huge compliment, he is one of my fav poets. Thank you very much
DeleteYou proved that frustration can create some good poetry! Glad you finally got the hubby+wine+sunset!
ReplyDeleteHi Jennifer!! Funny how strong emotions can really get that muse in gear :-) It was very nice to finally get that quiet time.
DeleteStarted swaying to the rap beat. Nice debut!
ReplyDeleteHi Kymm!! Thank you very much for the visit. Didn't even think of it that way, though I do love to write with a rhythm :-) So glad you were swaying :-)
DeleteCatchy and clever. Like it very much.
ReplyDeleteHi Dave!! So nice to see you, and glad you enjoyed the poem. Looking forward to reading yours soon :-)
DeleteWell done! Loved the internal rhyme & the ending was wonderful. The weight does hold a person down, nose to the grindstone!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary!! Thank you for all your kind words. The ending only came about because I needed 33 words. Otherwise I would have ended it sooner. Love how these prompts stretch me :-)
DeleteI love this poem~
ReplyDeleteAnd I am so feeling the frustration!
My hubby retires from the Navy in eleven days~
My Muse and him argue about creative time-I will be reminded of this poem as I dance around trying to make time~ :D
Happy it all worked out-all about the dance, lol
Hi Ella!! So wonderful to see you :-) I have missed you at PU. Finding creative time is definitely a dance. You deserve the time. Congratulations on hubby's retirement.
DeleteThank you for sharing a laugh and a smile with me <3
I can identify with this. Glad you got your fix!
ReplyDeleteHere is my offering: http://mcguffysreader.blogspot.com/2013/03/womens-day.html
Hi Ann!! Welcome :-) Me too! Really enjoyed my visit to your blog.
DeleteThis was a fun read... despite the frustration that prompted it's inception. Thank goodness you were rewarded, in the end!
ReplyDeleteHi Kim! So glad you enjoyed it. Yes, ultimately a very happy ending :-)
DeleteGlad Sunday went better :) Like your structure here. Cleverly done Sara.
ReplyDeleteHi David!! Me too :-) Thank you for the good wishes and kind compliment
DeleteLike the word and line breaks ~ I hope the frustration will eventually turn into jubilation with wine and the hubby ~
ReplyDeleteHi Grace!! Thank you for the good wishes-love that turn of phrase with the ion ending-and yes, finally jubilation :-)
DeleteI loved the poem and the commentary after as well
ReplyDeleteHi Kodjo! Nice to see you again---Thank you! So glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
DeleteLots of fun in the line-breaks with their double meaning. Your commentary throws the whole piece into a new light. Glad you can find space to write even in the middle of so much chaos!
ReplyDeleteAndrew!! So happy to see you :-) Thank you for the compliment!
Deletewoot...sounds like sunday was a good day for you...very cool line breaks, like ee cummings...oy and def the frustrations of the office as well...been there...i used to travel for work and those unexpected delays always frustrated....
ReplyDeleteHi Brian!! Yea, Sundays are usually good days :-) Comparing me to ee is high praise, Thank you!! And, glad you're not traveling for work anymore, I used to do that too--ugh
DeleteSuperbly done. Had me riveted.
ReplyDeleteHi Dave!! What a wonderful compliment-thank you very much :-)
DeleteAs always, the imagery is top notch! Though this is my first comment, I often make it to your blog after reading what's new on Rhyme Me A Smile, and I am always impressed!
ReplyDeleteHi M.!! Welcome :-) and Wow!!! Thank you very much, your comment completely made my day!
ReplyDeleteWould you mind if put a link to your site in the sidebar of my blog?
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