Creamy cups of
Petals poised on
Sepal pedestals
Ready to leave
Disem-
bark
From glossy green
Perches
On a windy whim
To sail
Southwesterly
Into a sea of grass
This is offered for OLN at dversepoets.com where Abhra has us writing about trees--I have tried for years to poetically capture this phenomenon--the Pond Apple trees that line the canals here, have lovely chinese lantern type blossoms (thank you to Serenity Spell at serenityspell.com for a great photo) that just drop from the trees into the canals, that flow to the Everglades (otherwise known as the sea of grass...) finally came to me today, to cast them as ships...enjoy! :-)
Beautiful and serene words! One of the reasons I like spring is the blossoms. The ones you feature in your poem are awesome.
ReplyDeleteHi Gabriella! I love the blossoms in Spring too. Thank you for your kind words :-)
DeleteAh.. so nice to have it described.. I have only seen the Everglades in winter.. so there were no flowers then.. loved the pace of your words
ReplyDeleteHi Bjorn! That is so cool that you've been to te Everglades :-) You'd have to go a little ways inland to see these.
DeleteThis is beautiful, Sara. I especially liked the way you used alliteration, which really enhanced your message!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary! wonderful to see you :-) Thank you, I love alliteration!
Deletebeautiful visual watching those petals float on the breeze....poised petals on sepal pedestals...ha...that was fun to say...smiles...
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! It is fun to say, thank you! I loved tongue twisters when i was a kid ;-)
DeleteI would love to see this kind of trees, so magical to see the sepal pedestals float in the sea of glass ~
ReplyDeleteHi Grace! The funny thing, is that the trees kind of hide the blossoms until they float free and fall onto the water :-)
DeleteHow beautiful!
ReplyDeleteHi Freya! Thank you for the visit and compliment :-)
DeleteI love poetry where in the course of a single sentence a thought or feeling or instance are perfectly encapsulated. Like your sepal pedestals and windy whim.
ReplyDeleteThat is a fantastic compliment, almost poetic in it's own right.Thank you very much :-)
Deletethanks for a vision of some place I've not yet known.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely, happy to do so---one of the things I love about poetry and the poetic community, I'm continually seeing places, images not known to me :-)
DeleteWhat a lovely sight this must be. Thanks for sharing it.
ReplyDeleteHi Peggy! Thank you, wish you were here to take a lovely photo of the blossoms floating down the canal :-)
Deletehow very cool... that sounds like a lovely sight indeed... i wish we had this over here but never seen them..
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! It is lovely, we don't have the mountains or art galleries that you have though...:-)
DeleteWhat a beautiful tree - one I had not heard of. Lovely delicate lantern-like blooms....cool!
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry! It is an unusual tree. Actually, it looks more like a big shrub, but it's blossoms are wonderful :-)
DeleteWould love to flow with it:)
ReplyDeleteHi Vandana! I love that thought :-)
Deletepicturesque....so lovely blooms waiting for the flight....
ReplyDeleteHi Sumana! Thank you very much :-)
DeleteI love 'sepal pedestals' and 'On a windy whim to sail southwesterly'.. lovely lines, very beautiful imagery...
ReplyDeleteHi! Thank you, those were some of my favorite lines too :-)
Deletea vibrant word palette that beautifully captures a bit of nature that, clearly, has touched your heart.
ReplyDeleteHi Wendy! You are right, I am captivated by these little blossoms
Delete:-) Thank you
Not only are you the Cracker Jack, Sara. You are also the prize, as this piece demonstrates. A lovely little poem, well expressed, my friend.
ReplyDeleteHi Walt! What a sweet surprise :-) Thank you so much for the visit, and your kind and clever words
DeleteA lovely title to go with lovely words. Lyrical imagery captured in a dozen lines. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteHi Donna! Thank you very much, what a beautiful summary and compliment :-)
DeleteWonder what happens after they fall into the water.
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