My bed's a planet
Let me stay in it
Peaceful in orbit
And leave the horror
No, not the snorer
The beckoning door
Where the evil grows
Never ever slows
Ignoring the snows
And chortles at me
While I spray with glee
Poison chemically
(and organically)
Sigh, futility
Next weekend I'll see
New sprouts creepily
Spreading on the deck
My life is a wreck
There's just no respect
From this chlorophyllic dreck
This was supposed to be a Englyn (3
lines 7 syllables, yet somehow 5 stuck in my head—so it's not,
seven, it's 5, and I had to add that line at the end to make sense--but it was a valiant attempt, so I'm linking to
dversepoets.com) also in response to Poetic Asides take a line and
use it—“my bed is a planet” (kinda made me think of “plant”
so I went with that...) and last but certainly not least, a poem in
response to poetryjam's “Monster” prompt poetryjaam.blogspot.com
Whew!! Weeds in my pavers are definitely monstrous, I refuse to use
the even more evil herbicides, however, those weeds are definitely
laughing at me, and I shudder to think of the masses of roots that
are just waiting to take over...
great take on all the prompts! those evil weeds! how dare they invade! {smile}
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Deletei am glad you linked...i think we should link even if we dont get it right because it is about learning...and poetry should be fun...and we willing to screw it up....cause that does not make it a bad poem at all...like yours is not a bad poem...
ReplyDeleteugh i dont want to think about the weeds right now...i am hoping that winter kills them...ha...and i hope life is not too much of wreck for you...smiles.
Brian, thank you for your constant encouragement and comment. Very, very much appreciated! Hope that winter does kill those little buggers...;-) Wreck? Naw, just rhymes with deck (ha!)
DeleteNice share, Sara. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Ayala! Good to see you-thank you for the comments :-)
DeleteLOL.... How about trying dish soap? There must be something natural you can use to kill 'em! ?
ReplyDeleteThis gave me a chuckle... You're braver than I am, I never even tried that form ;)
Hi Brenda!! Actually I use a mix of white vinegar and dish soap. It kinda works, crisps the leaves pretty well. But they start to sprout again in about a week. I don't understand, they have the whole yard! Why grow in the cracks of my pavers? :-) Happy to share a chuckle with you!
DeleteFive is fine ... my hat is off to you for even attempting this form!
ReplyDeleteHi Helen! Thank you, attempted being the operative word there:-)
DeleteFunny, Sara, this poem. The rhythm and rhyme, the honest frustration with weeds and the willingness to do just about anything to be rid of them!
ReplyDeleteMy dear friend Marques Bovre (Bovary) wrote a song in celebration of the dandelion - I'll email you a link. He's in love with rebellious weeds, ha ha. It will make you smile. Love, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/10/08/first-time-no-charm/
Hi Amy!! What wonderful comments! I love dandelions, and there is a part of me that wants to live and let live, just not quite there yet....:-)
Deletethis gave me a smile... so you cheated a little - pffft, doesn't matter, the wonderful choice of words totally makes up for it. great read!
ReplyDeleteHi!! Thank you very much for the visit, and encouragement :-) sharing a smile is what it's all about!
DeleteYou have weaved the words beautifully !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much!!
DeleteI like that "bed" is a flower bed here. I hate weeding, too... and I must get out there today and pull. Maybe we can cheer each other on?
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie!! I really like your take on my poem. And I love the idea of a little "I hate weeding" support group--I'm cheering you on, yank those weeds out! :-)
ReplyDeleteHa! Sara, what a gorgeous mashup this is! ;)
ReplyDeleteThis spills loose chaotic and free and beautiful, like so many surprisingly lovely weeds. :)
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Hi De!! So nice to see you! And love your poetic reply--thank you! :-)
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Blooms and spills like a gorgeous chaotic weed. ;)
Ya know what? I have had several people say that--and then it posts twice--my notice that "comments are visible after approval" must be berry, berry small...:-)
Delete"but it was a valiant attempt,.."
ReplyDeleteWait, *we* will decide that! :-)
Indeed 'twas valiant. Life, shows us how fast she wants to eat us.
Hi Sabio! How wonderful to see you and your wit here again :-) Yes, how arrogant of me to suggest I know the level of valor required--LOL Thank you for the ultimate vote of confidence--love your quote too!
DeleteWitty as can be! Loved this! Here on the farm we figure that if the weeds are green, they can stay. 8-)
ReplyDeleteHi Mary Ann! So glad you enjoyed this--I like the farm attitude :-)
Deletehaha! love the image of weeds as a monster...fun take :)
ReplyDeleteHi! Nice to see you--thank you for joining in the fun :-)
DeleteWhat a fun look at your monsters! Great job combining prompts, I find myself doing that quite a bit as well, tends to give me a little more focus when I write.
ReplyDeleteI understand your reluctance about using chemical herbicides. I use a mixture of vinegar, dish soap, and salt myself. Sprayed on a sunny day, I can usually get two to three weeks of respite from those little monsters!
Thanks so much for playing along with us at Poetry Jam this week!
Hi Mary!! So happy to see you :-) I do enjoy the challenge of combining the prompts. How much salt do you use? I use vinegar and dish soap--only gives me about a week of relief (before re-leaf?) Always enjoy playing at Poetry Jam! Thank you for the fun prompt!
ReplyDeleteVisiting from Poetry Jam as well.....I'd say if weeds are the worst monsters you are facing, you're very fortunate. LOL. But I know everything is relative!!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary! Thank you for the visit and you are absolutely right--weeds are not the worst monsters, they made me think of those movies where the monster always comes back-no matter what you do. :-)
DeleteThe weeds drive my poor husband crazy. i don't care as much but don't like all the herbicides. Our weeds laughed at vinegar! I think they liked it!
ReplyDeleteHi! Thank you so much for the visit and fun comment
Delete:-) You are probably right, I thought I heard some giggling last time I was spraying that vinegar!!
Fun verse! I'm not familiar with that form, but I enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteHi Mad--you are so sweet. Thank you! :-)
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