Whispers of the wild
Shadow-child
Tip-toed barefoot
Sharp cold granite
Peak just to kiss
The soft white cheek
Of the moon
I guess this is my week to be slightly
off the beaten path of prompts or direction. Have to say, this is
not where this poem was headed originally, but sometimes you just
have to go with it. The flow of words is supposed flow like a moonbeam... This is just to say, thank you for the prompts
at Poetry Jam (Shadows-Love those! Thank you Peggy)
poetryjaam.blogspot.com; Poets United (Wolf), but actually that's
where I got my beginning line—thank you Ella, my muse was
enchanted! Poetryblogroll.blogspot.com and for the inspiring and
generous Brian who's tending bar for Open Link night at
dversepoets.com
kissing the soft white cheeks of the moon..oh i like...cool on the moonbeam shape as well..and smiles on what you say about bri...he def. IS inspiring and generous...smiles
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! I could see you enjoying those soft white cheeks, your poems are always so tactile and sensual :-) You are also inspiring and generous! Thank you
DeleteYes, you've got to go where the poem itself takes you. Never mind the poor poet, who is just the slave that has to follow :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Aprille! Delightful to see you, thank you for understanding--and making me laugh--great comment :-)
DeleteMoon kisses will be enigmatic ... well written !!!
ReplyDeleteHi! Thank you as always for your constancy--great word enigmatic, perfect actually :-)
DeleteBeautiful. I like the innocence in this. It was almost fairy tale like in its thinking. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteHi Brenda! Lovely to see you. It did have a fairy tale feel when I was writing it, didn't have a name for it until now--thank you!
Deletesmiles...a bit of magic there....i love going barefoot....my fav way to be...and climbing up just to give the moon a kiss on the cheek...that left me smiling for sure....
ReplyDeleteHi Brian!! I love going barefoot too--just seemed like the right way to approach the moon :-)
DeleteI really liked how you arranged your lines in this poem....and that first line, 'Whispers of the wild,' sings! And kissing the moon sounds sublime.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary!! Glad that you enjoyed that phrase too--Ella has a magic touch. Delightful comments too, thank you :-)
DeleteI can feel the cold granite beneath my feet. Great job.
ReplyDeleteHi Jen! Welcome!! I love granite :-) Glad you could feel it too--Thank you for your kind words.
DeleteI love how you presented this poem. I definitely see a moon beam! I'd love to kiss the moon...
ReplyDeleteHi Dana!! Great to see you again--glad you could see the moon beam, Thank you!
DeleteBeautiful, kiddo, love whispers of the wild and the soft white cheek of the moon. Just lovely.
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry!! So good to see you. Glad you could join me in the moonlight :-)
DeleteI traveled your moonbeam with pleasure. Thank you for visiting my blog, too.
ReplyDeleteHi Susan! It was my pleasure to visit your blog, look forward to stopping in again. Love your comment--traveling the moonbeam :-)
DeleteReally, your visual is very effective... love it.
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie!! Thank you very much :-)
DeleteHow utterly wild and free, but somehow reverent at the same time!
ReplyDeleteHi Kathy! Welcome!! Really like your take on this--I think the moon always deserves a little reverence--even when it's kissed ;-) Thank you for the thoughtful comment
DeleteI just love the child-like innocence of this poem ---barefoot and kissing the moon ! So well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Barbara!! it brings back some memories of children's stories I used to read to my kids. Thank you very much for the visit and lovely comment :-)
DeleteBeautiful, simple innocence. Love it. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rachel!! Nice to see you, again. Your comment is beautiful and simple too! Thank you:-)
DeleteYou've done such a great job of capturing the gentle magic that exists in the heart of the young. Love the way you've shaped this as well. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary!! Always good to see you. Love those words, gentle magic. A wonderful compliment! Thank you :-)
DeleteThis path sounds like one I want to walk ... lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteHi Helen!! I always love your comments, you have such a way of summarizing my poems into a really lovely sentence that makes me smile :-)
DeleteWonderful 'moonbeam'. Very innovative take Sara! Short and sweet! Nicely!
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Hi Hank!! Wonderful to see you--yes, I tend to stay on the short and sweet path--thank you :-)
Deleteoh! this is really lovely, Sara! delightful!
ReplyDeletethank you for participating at Poetry Jam!
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Hi Dani!! Thank you very much--love being part of the Poetry Jam community :-)
DeleteLovely and well done!
ReplyDeleteHi Mad!! Thank you very much. So glad you enjoyed it.:-)
DeleteI think this is a beautiful expression. The texture is rich. The cold marble, the moon light, the child. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica!! Welcome. I like how you phrased that "beautiful expression" Thank you for your lovely words. :-)
Deletenice interview today over at poets united...smiles.
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