Wednesday, December 19, 2012

Looking Up

Peach flavored translucence
With a side of light
Ethereal in its emptiness
Until
A flock of winged silhouettes
Appear
Like cut outs
From the evening sky
Puzzle pieces shifting
High on the morning breeze
A vision broken
When the sun reaches out
And reveals their true colors

This is written for the prompt from Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com, who invites us to take a walk and write about what we see. The dogs and I saw this vision this morning. Here in Florida it always looks to me like the birds are pieces of the sky that somehow fell out of the aerial jigsaw :-) Also, shared with the wonderful Open Link Night at dversepoets.com

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  1. I live the idea that the birds are pieces that fell out of an aerial jigsaw. What a creative thought. Very nice poem, Sara.

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    1. Hi Mary!! Love looking at the birds :-) it works both ways the white ibis or the dawn sillouhettes. Thank you!

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  2. nice...i love it...what a cool thought on the birds being pieces fallen out of the sky...what part of florida are you in? i lived in valrico for several years....and forgive me if we;ve had this conversation before...

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    1. Hi Brian!! I'm in South Florida, Fort Lauderdale. Quite a change from Northern CA--do love the birds and skies here.

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  3. An interesting collage of images that come together into a portrait of the sky, twilit or dawning.

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    1. Hi!! So nice to see you again :-) Great observation about the time of day, two of my favorite times.

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  4. loved that image of the birds being parts of a puzzle - the sky:)

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    1. Hi!! Welcome :-) Thank you for the visit and kind words.

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  5. This is wonderful... I loved the way you painted this... beautiful!

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    1. Hi Sreeja!!! So glad you enjoyed my word painting, thank you :-)

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  6. You captured the essence of Florida ... I lived there for eight years, many walks under those peach colored skies.

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    1. Hi Helen!! Really enjoyed your poetic walk too. Thank you:-)

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  7. Such a fun idea to be able to walk out to a different puzzle everyday!

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    1. Hi Robyn!! I love that idea, Thank you :-)

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  8. Great imagery of the birds being pieces of puzzle missing from the sky... what a fabulous imagination. Your walk with the dogs sounds a lot warmer than ours was but still, it's good to be outside even here before we drop into the real sub zero temps...lol
    Delightful read Sara.

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    1. Hi Brenda!! You always make me smile :-) Thank you! Really enjoyed your poetic walk as well.

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  9. Hi. Loved the jigsaw image and the colours are vividly described. Enjoyed reading this.

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    1. Hi ND!! Loved your mallards :-) Thank you for the visit and compliment!

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  10. love the birds like cut outs from the evening sky..beautiful to watch the birds..so much freedom in their moves..

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    1. Hi Claudia!! I have always loved birds, freedom and agility and then there's the gymnastics at the bird feeder :-) Thank you

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  11. I enjoyed this and love thinking about the birds as cut-outs from the sky. I will remember this image!

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    1. Hi Peggy!! What a wonderful compliment :-) Thank you so much. Hope that you have a delightful holiday!

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  12. Love this, creative and lovely.

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    1. Hi Ayala!! Thank you very much :-)

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  13. love your imagery!

    thanks for participating at Poetry Jam!


    dani

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    1. Hi Dani!! Really appreciate all you do at the Jam :-) It's a wonderful place to be.

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  14. Sara- This is lovely. Birds always fill the empty sky with joy (IMHO). I hope you have a wonderful Christmas!

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    1. Hi Laurie!! So nice to see you (as always) :-) I love that view, they are joyful. Hope that you have a wonderful Christmas too! Thank you!

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  15. I love the way you see those birds! Lovely poem. :)

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    1. Hi Rachel!! Thank you very much :-) Have a wonderful holiday!

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  16. Merry Christmas to you and your beautiful family! :-) Feliz Navidad!

    Greetings from London.

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    1. Hi Cuban!! Muchos Felicidades to you and your family as well. So happy to have met you :-)

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  17. A perfect image of birds in the sky.

    Tim

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    1. Hi Tim!! Welcome, and thank you very much for the compliment :-)

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