Wednesday, May 1, 2013

Wayward Sun

Beautiful beamer
Send a streamer
Help us to piece
To seize
These days
Rays us
Beyond these clouds
Of  hopelessness
This mess
Melt the fight
Show us the light
The way
To a brighter day

A very timely prompt for me, and society, from Poetry Jam, "Carry On"  (whoops, just found out that was last week! However, this week is "Soak" and this is a sun soaked poem, so I'm sharing it with the wonder-ful poets at poetryjaam.blogspot.com--My mind automatically went to the song by Kansas--"Carry On My Wayward Son". Hence the title :-)  Enjoy, hope that it lightens your heart a bit <3

28 comments:

  1. Love how your use of "rays"! I'm soaking up all the hope in your words!

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    1. Hi Robyn!! Yes, that was fun. Glad you are soaking up the goodness :-)

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    1. Hi De!! Thank you for the Love ;-)

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  3. ah great song by kansas....smiles...i like the hope too of something beyond the clods of this present chaos...show us how to get there surely...smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian!! Yes, I thought it was appropriate--"There'll be peace, when you are done..." Was going to post a link to it, but then was too late on that prompt--Glad that you knew what I was talking about
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  4. Ah, yes. The answer is up above in the light. I love this, Sara.

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    1. Hi Laurie! Thank you for such a wonderful compliment :-)

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    1. Hi Kim!! So glad you enjoyed it-Thank you :-)

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  6. You referenced one of my favorite songs ... beams and streams are lovely words, aren't they?

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    1. Hi Helen!! Beams and streams are lovely, at first I was going to try and play with the song "Beautiful Dreamer, Wake unto thee..." but it just didn't flow :-)

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  7. We all definitely need to find the way to a better day. The bright sun definitely helps!!

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  8. this has a wonderful rhythm and yes...we def. need that rays that show us the place beyond the clouds...

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    1. Hi Claudia, thank you I was striving for a flow/rhythm with these words, appreciate that you felt it:-)

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  9. Methinks peace, not piece, and raise, not rays, might have made more sense - at least to this reader...

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  10. Hi Jinksy!! Nice to see you:-) I did play with switching peace and piece, however, since it was a solution type poem and I was toying with wordplay, I stuck with piece. And Rays was more wordplay with the sun inspired words. I like to hear comments that make me think about my choices, though, so keep 'em coming:-)

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  11. I like the metaphor of the sun shining light and bringing hope. Nice! :)

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    1. Hi Loredana!! So glad you enjoyed it:-)

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  12. I really like how you have composed this and I love the metaphor =)

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    1. Hi! So nice to see you again :-) Thank you for the kind words and smile!

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  13. This is so uplifting ... have a bright weekend :-)

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    1. Thank you Speck! So glad you enjoyed it. Hope that you had a Bright weekend too :-)

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  14. Yes a very up poem--both carrying on and soaking it in! Thanks.

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  15. hey you...hope your week is going well...

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  16. LOVE your play on words in the title!!! ♥

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!