Sunday, July 21, 2013

The Spaces Inbetween



Paint me a mosaic
Shadowed wavelets in a row
In the spaces inbetween
The sun's afterglow
Make it molten flow-
ing
Copper, silver sheet
Then slip it here
Inside my heart
Where it can softly
Beat

This is offered for Poets United Poetry Pantry poetryblogroll.blogspot.com where I swim with and am inspired by my fellow poets, and Poetic Bloomings prompt of "waves" a month of beach related poems, come splash around :-)  PS I took the photo on an evening in Florida Bay, loved the patterns and molten feel of it

37 comments:

  1. I like the ending of this one, unexpected, intriguing.

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    1. Hi Nissa! Thank you, it took me awhile to come up with that:-)

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  2. That photo is JUST beautiful, and the poem makes my heart sing. Lovely writing.

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    1. Hi Mary! So happy to have you join the heart chorus:-) Thank you very much!

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    1. Hi Audrey! Thank you so much, you really gave me a smile:-)

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  4. love...the oceans rhythm, the waves...it is where i go to refind my own rhythm at times...to think of someone making it and putting it in your heart, that is magic for me...

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    1. Hi Brian! Me too, it's always been where I find peace--I like how you put it--refind my own rhythm:-) always happy to share magic--thank
      you!

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  5. This is so lovely and it fits right inside MY heart!

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    1. Hi Sherry! So nice to see you, love that compliment :-) Thank you!

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  6. Gorgeous writing beautiful composition

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  7. oh i love how you capture the magic of the waves, the texture, rhythm - slipping it inside your heart where it can beat softly... really love the feel of this sara

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    1. Hi Claudia! Thank you so much that is quite a lovely compliment :-)

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  8. Writing at its best. Many thanks.

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    1. Hi Dave! Thank you very much:-) You just made my day

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    2. Hi Dave! Thank you very much--you just made my day:-)

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  9. Lovely to think of swallowing the lapping of water and making it into a heart beat. Very pretty image - I know you didn't have swallowing1 k. (Karin manicddaily on wordpress)

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    1. Hi Karin! That's the lovely thing about poetry, everyone has their own visions:-) I was thinking mentally slipping it in, butr I like the idea of turning lapping water into a heartbeat. Thank you! Also loved your poem:-)

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    1. Hi Gail! Thank you, that's exactly the mood I was going for :-)

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    1. Hi Akila! Thank you very much :-)

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  12. Man alive, that's beautiful, lovely poem! So full of intensity in its shortness and yet so romantic, too. Many thanks. I enjoyed that.

    Greetings from London.

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    1. Hi Cubsn! Nice to see you and your enthusiasm!! Thank you :-)

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  13. happy monday. smiles.
    hope you are doing well.

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  14. Oh, Sara, the copper and silver from picture to poem, how lovely! You know, I'm one for slipping things like this in my heart, too... I'm surprised there's room for blood to flow, LOL.

    Lovely meditation, loved the rhyme with word break at "flow-ing"... Amy

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    1. Hi Amy! Me too, always stuffing things in there that I love--and there's so much to love! :-) Thank you!

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  15. Oh, Sara. This speaks to the deepest part of me. Gorgeous.

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    1. Hi De! That means a lot coming from you--who can reach that part of me almost on a daily basis :-) Thank you!

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  16. oh, what an image rich gem of a poem this is, i liked this an awful lot. *smiles*

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    1. Hi! So nice to see you again--what a lovely compliment, thank you very much!! :-)

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  17. This looks like a beautiful abstract painting - and I adore "molten flowing copper".

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!