Thursday, August 15, 2013

Sweet Nothings

Billions of voices
Rise into the stratosphere
Yet in that thin air
They all disappear
The cries, speeches,
Laughter, shrieks
Stretch, flatten into
Mere wisps floating in
The abyss of dark space
Perhaps a star or comet
Might snag a vowel
Or consonant and keep it
Hanging by its stem or
Snuggled in its orbit
Humming sweet nothings
In harmony
With the uni-verse

A poem prompted by Mary's invitation at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com to write a poem inspired by Simon and Garfunkel's "Sounds of Silence" a song that has always inspired me with it's amazing words "like silent raindrops fell"  but always left me with a sense of deep sadness "ten thousand people...people writing songs that voices never shared..."   So, started in one direction ended up in another...:-)  Enjoy!
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  1. MaryAugust 15, 2013 at 10:27 AM

    I enjoyed this, Sara. My dad always told me that once a sound was made it just kept traveling. Your poem expresses this as well...so many sounds rising into the universe. What an interesting chorus of sounds there must be 'up there.'

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    1. SaravAugust 15, 2013 at 12:08 PM

      Hi Mary! I love the idea of a chorus :-) Sounds in space are so interesting.

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  2. MaryAugust 15, 2013 at 11:33 AM

    P.S. Don't forget to link this to Poetry Jam!

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    1. SaravAugust 15, 2013 at 12:09 PM

      Funny thing, I was driving to work and that little subconscious that double-checks me in the background said "Hey! you forgot to link!" I'm linked now--thank you :-)

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  3. Brian MillerAugust 15, 2013 at 12:34 PM

    nice....ok, bizarre link...it made me think of there be no screaming in space....i think that came from a very old horror movie...lol...the rising of voices to disappate to silence is pretty cool though...happy thursday!

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:23 AM

      Hi Brian! Actually you're right, my amateur astrophysical son told me that sound needs matter to exist and that in space there is no matter so theoretically no sound. The sounds from Earth bounce back and forth from the atmosphere to earth until they dissipate. That would have been an interesting poem! :-)

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  4. HelenAugust 15, 2013 at 1:33 PM

    I simply love the idea of snagging a vowel or consonant, keeping it!!!

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:25 AM

      Hi Helen! Me too:-) I pictured the words fragmenting in space and getting caught...

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  5. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 15, 2013 at 4:58 PM

    This is such a great response to the prompt...I, too, especially smiled at the idea of a star or comet snagging a word or two........sweet!

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:27 AM

      Hi Sherry! Loved your take on this too--Thank you:-)

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  6. Laurie KolpAugust 15, 2013 at 9:57 PM

    I guess that's how it is in cyber space. I like the idea of a comet snagging a vowel or consonant and humming sweet harmony.

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:32 AM

      Hi Laurie! Thank you, I was thinking how lonely it is in space and nothing like a little vowel to keep you company, inspire a song or two:-)

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  7. humbirdAugust 16, 2013 at 12:11 AM

    I see many comments about these comet and stars'Humming sweet nothings', but it's very sweet image :)

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:34 AM

      Hi Humbird! Welcome:-) that does appear to be the favorite line/image. :-) Thank you very much for the visit!

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  8. aspiritofsimplicityAugust 16, 2013 at 1:28 AM

    very nice. I like the idea of our conversations floating around in space.

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:36 AM

      Hi! And Welcome :-) Wouldn't it be fun if the words recombined and came back to us as new conversations?

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  9. ClaudiaAugust 16, 2013 at 5:15 AM

    Perhaps a star or comet
    Might snag a vowel
    Or consonant and keep it
    Hanging by its stem or
    Snuggled in its orbit... i just LOVE the idea of this... who knows where all our sounds hang or whatever they do... having a bit fun out there...smiles... this is so charming

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:39 AM

      Hi Claudia! Thank you so much--your enthusiasm gave me a big smile with my coffee this morning:-) it's so much fun to play with words, isn't it? I sent your Unplugged poem to a friend and she loved it, too.

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    2. ClaudiaAugust 19, 2013 at 3:53 PM

      oh nice....

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  10. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 8:29 AM

    Hi Loredana! Thank you, really enjoyed your imagery also, in words and photos :-)

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  11. rallentandaAugust 16, 2013 at 9:42 AM

    I thought this was quite brilliant...the way you captured the silence of space with a spasmodic little disconnected echo here and there...i imagine it would just be like that...very very good!

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 4:38 PM

      Hi Rallentamda! Wow you certainly know how to make my day! Thank you very much--you really understood where I was going with this :-)

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  12. PanchaliAugust 16, 2013 at 2:10 PM

    Immaculate!! Echoes are rhythmical music, and they provide acoustic support to singers!!But, how magically you captured the silence here..
    "Perhaps a star or comet
    Might snag a vowel
    Or consonant and keep it"--Perhaps, this is how echoes fade away.
    Lovely poem.

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    1. SaravAugust 16, 2013 at 4:43 PM

      Hi Panchali! My goodness, I am overwhelmed with all your beautiful words. There is a poem in that compliment:-) Especially love echoes, I didn't see it that way. Thank you so much for noting that!

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  13. Mary Ann PotterAugust 16, 2013 at 8:02 PM

    Go ahead and grab a few of those snagged vowels and consonants! Loved your poem --- anxious to see what you write next!

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    1. SaravAugust 17, 2013 at 11:55 AM

      Hi Mary Ann! Thank you so much--that is one of the nicest things you could say! :-)

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  14. Wayne PitchkoAugust 17, 2013 at 1:01 AM

    thanks for sharing.....well done

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  15. SaravAugust 17, 2013 at 12:21 PM

    Hi Wayne! Thank you for the visit :-)

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  16. Jennifer WagnerAugust 17, 2013 at 7:26 PM

    I really like that somehow I can picture this in my mind's eye! I agree with some of the above sentiments: brilliant and a great response to the prompt!

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    1. SaravAugust 18, 2013 at 3:56 PM

      Hi Jennifer! Thank you very much--a great compliment that you can picture this, exactly what I was hoping for :-)

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  17. kelvin s.m.August 19, 2013 at 12:59 AM

    ...sweet nothings & the beauty in silence.... and you smiled for no reason... it just happened like you never intended it... that sometimes our heart responds when it feels / hears / sees / smells beauty that is beyond admiration... and it's called 'appreciation'... smiles... see i felt it here... good day!

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  18. AnonymousAugust 20, 2013 at 12:35 AM

    I can hear the sounds fading away. Great imagery!
    I like the idea of a star grabbing a letter to listen to later.

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  19. alan1704August 20, 2013 at 1:44 AM

    Great picture of the wonder and beauty of silence, you can feel it.

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  20. MargaretAugust 21, 2013 at 11:36 PM

    Perhaps a star or comet
    Might snag a vowel

    Very clever!

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