Bored
Stiff
As a
Board
Joy-
Less
Miss-
ing
Bliss
That mane of flame
No one could tame
Now shorn
Con-
form-
ity
Isn't golden
Did you forget
Sam-
son?
Long for
That grin
Lost in
The slushy
Bottom
Offered for Laurie's prompt at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com to write an olympian poem in 28 lines or less. Heartbreaking the threes in snowboarding--Lindsay third try, so far ahead in women's second semifinals and falls; Shaun always so brilliantly glowing, now shorn and sad--everyone talking about the slushy bottom in the half pipe...ah life, you just never know....at least the couples won in ice-skating :-)
Stiff
As a
Board
Joy-
Less
Miss-
ing
Bliss
That mane of flame
No one could tame
Now shorn
Con-
form-
ity
Isn't golden
Did you forget
Sam-
son?
Long for
That grin
Lost in
The slushy
Bottom
Offered for Laurie's prompt at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com to write an olympian poem in 28 lines or less. Heartbreaking the threes in snowboarding--Lindsay third try, so far ahead in women's second semifinals and falls; Shaun always so brilliantly glowing, now shorn and sad--everyone talking about the slushy bottom in the half pipe...ah life, you just never know....at least the couples won in ice-skating :-)
Oh the loss to the slushy bottom--very sad but still fun to watch the overall event.
ReplyDeleteHi Peggy! Oh yes, I love watching the snowboarding especially, the "air"that they get is amazing!
Deletenice link to samson...its sad the conditions of olympic village and of the tubes...the slushy bottom...part of competing is overcoming those things but....
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! Yes, the whole thing is wrong..should not have been in Russia--my stepdaughter and I actually got pretty silly over their repeated "slushy bottom" comments...;-)
DeleteThe Olympics always have happy endings as well as sad ones, it seems. I was especially sad about Shaun.... I think the event that left me most heartbroken was the defeat of the US women's hockey team today.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary! So true, I was really sad about Shaun, he had such an indomitable joyous spirit and I didn't see that in him this time. Oh no! When I left them, the US was winning!! Aw. They looked fantastic.
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DeleteOne man's (or woman's) happiness is another one's sorrow. It must be so hard for all these people to train for four years and have their hopes dashed within a few seconds.
ReplyDeleteHi Gabriella! Unfortunately, that is the way of things, not everyone can win. I saw on speed skater from Germany who was disqualified because she false started twice. The second time was barely a twitch of her hand. Heart breaking
DeleteCharmingly penned. I take it: there is no joy in Mudville - or is it Slushville? Smiles
ReplyDeleteHi Wendy! Thank you for picking up on the fun and for the smiles! :-)
DeleteI only watch the skating events and they are on in the early hours of the morning here....so my eyes are hanging out on their stalks:)
ReplyDeleteHi Rallentanda! I love the skating! We record the events and watch it at night, but my husband likes to watch every event so we haven't seen the skating yet...:-P
DeleteI enjoyed the form of your poem ... And the content!
ReplyDeleteHi Helen! Thank you very much :-)
DeleteI like how you wrote this and included some of the issues from the Olympics.
ReplyDeleteHi Myrna! Thank you. I enjoyed your poem too:-)
Deletesam-son... very cool nod here... i hope his strength and talent weren't in his hair like it was with samson - but then... it will grow again until the next olympics start...smiles
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! Thank you. I didn't know he'd cut his hair until the event...didn't even recognize him I don't know if he's going to come back--he's already richer than Midas ;-)
DeleteNicely done thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteHi Wayne! Nice to see you, thank you for the kind words.
DeleteIt's been quite a winter Olympics, huh? And now they are saying the skating judges didn't score fairly.
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie! Oh my goodness, it has been. I can't believe they're saying that...thank you for coming by :-)
DeleteI always feel so bad for the athletes when they lose. So many hours spent training and then their dreams squashed so quickly!
ReplyDeleteHi Robyn! Me too. It's heartbreaking, especially for Lindsay who has tried 3 times..yikes! I think after two tries, that would have been in for me ;-)
Deletea slushy bottom in the halfpipe -- not a situation we shall have to worry about in daily life, thank good ness :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Hanna! Welcome :-) Yes, happy we don't have to worry about slushy bottoms...;-)
DeleteGreat write. Cutting of hair of course is in many cultures associated with mourning or with shame. I loved the association with Samson.
ReplyDeleteHi Nicholas! Excellent point, really enjoyed your take on this. Thank you :-)
DeleteCool poem! I love the Sam-son line. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rachel! So nice to see you--Thank you! :-)
DeleteSara, how you combined the necessaries of the prompt with the Olympics... I am glad more folks were not hurt on those poorly maintained surfaces. Vladimir Putin should be ashamed of the conditions of the stadium, as well as his putting forth one of the warmest cities in Russia for the Winter games. I also think the Olympic committee (fraught with graft) should be taken to task.,
ReplyDeleteHaving said all that, your inner mechanisms, the sly rhymes and broken words, all were used to great effect. It enhanced the feeling of broken dreams and awkward falls you describe. THis is very good writing, my friend. Amy
Hi Amy! I have to say, your comment totally made my day. Especially your analysis--thank you so much for taking the time to notice and comment on my sly rhymes and broken-ness. :-)
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