Friday, August 22, 2014

Be Your Own Star

If a palm frond waves
Will you wave back?
Or just nod at
Waves slapping their palms
On the sand
There's a grain of truth
In the seas
And we rarely see it
Spending time wishing on stars
But its time to be your own star
Light your path through
The trees
And remember to wave
At palms on the way
( Everyone needs a frond...)

This is offered for Sumana's prompt to write about a path at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com, and for Dverse Poets where Victoria asked us to write a poem with patterns, I was playing with homonyms. As you can see from the poem, I was just playing in general... a wordplay that took on a life of it's own.  Happy Friday everyone!! :-)

41 comments:

  1. Oh waving at palms -- raising my palms.. I love your wordplay here..

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    1. Hi Bjorn! Thank you for the wave and joining in the wordplay :-)

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  2. I like the idea of lighting your own path, as I think each of us musty learn to be our own brightest light. And waving at Palm fronds makes me smile. Nice poem.

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    1. Hi Mary! Me too, this took a lot of different turns at first and I had to go back and find the real path. Thank you :-)

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  3. I enjoyed the play on words and the sweet atmosphere they created. I would gladly wave back at those palm trees.

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    1. Hi Gabriella! So happy that you enjoyed it and appreciate the palm love :-)

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  4. This is such a fun write! I love poetic word play. It usually confers a wonderful whimsical vibe upon a piece - though it is deceptively much harder to pull off than it might, at first, appear. And I agree: "Everyone needs a frond..."

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    1. Hi Wendy! So happy that you enjoyed my whimsy. It did take several rewrites, and I wasn't sure that I should put in that last line, but I couldn't resist :-)

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  5. Lovely word play....lovely message!!

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    1. Hi Carrie! Thank you very much :-)

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  6. This was fun to read and I'm all for palm waving..see I'm waving now...

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    1. Hi Truedessa! Thank you so much for the visit and the wave, you gave me a big smile :-)

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  7. Sure I would wave back too smiles ~ Enjoyed your response ~

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    1. Hi Grace! Thank you for the wave, the joy and the smiles :-)

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  8. Lovely and striking wordplay Sara...such a delightful read..and I'm waving mine :)...thanks for participating with this beauty...

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    1. Hi Sumana! I love all the waves and delight. It was a wonderful prompt :-) Thank you!

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    1. Hi Rallentanda! Wasn't sure about including that last line. Thought you might enjoy that line, though :-) So glad you did!

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  10. everyone does feel the need to be acknowledged...to get a wave back...in peace...and there is great wisdom in being our own stars....

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    1. Hi Brian! So true we all want to feel that connection. Thank you for the compliment. :-)

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    1. Hi Laurie! So glad you enjoyed it. I wasn't sure if I was overreaching, but I couldn't resist ;-)

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  12. Love it! Put a big ol' smile on my face.

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    1. Hi! I'm a huge fan of big 'ol smiles! So happy you enjoyed this :-)

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  13. yes, everyone does need a frond. :)

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    1. Thank you for enjoying that line, I really wasn't sure about including it, but also couldn't resist :-)

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  14. be your own star and let your light shine so nice a thought

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    1. Hi Rae! I was really happy when that wordplay finally came together :-)

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  15. This is playful and beautiful at the same time, Sara. I so enjoyed reading your poem!

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    1. Hi Nicholas! What a wonderful compliment, you really made my day. Thank you! :-)

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  16. Oh, I really enjoyed this! "Everyone needs a frond" --- priceless!!!

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    1. Hi Mary Ann! I am thrilled that you enjoyed this so much, I really enjoyed your visit :-)

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  17. Such fun - not shallow mirth of course - deep watery fun - homonyms sound so coooooool! Loved it.

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    1. Hi Beachanny! How delightful to find a fellow fan of homonyms, thank you :-)

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  18. oh yes - i think we should def. wave back... we all need friends and often find them in unexpected places..

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  19. Yes there is a grain of truth in the sea and we hardly see it. So true.

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  20. Love this:
    "There's a grain of truth
    In the seas"
    This makes me think that grain of truth is found in salt, which means the answers might be in our own tears. Beautiful.

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!