The bluesman wailed under a swaying moon
The Ice Queen sipped the sound
Her tongue was sliced by C Sharp
But no blood was found
Melody flew through her lips
Then was consumed
By the sun
Rays
Of beat
Bounced off the trees
Who boughed and shook
Their shiny leaves
Willow gave a shimmy shake
Left musical leaf notes
In her wake
Breezling fingers flew
Between
Showering
Music that
Tasted green
And that old man
Couldn't stop clapping
This is offered for Claudia's prompt at Dverse Poets dVersepoets.com to write a fantasy story using certain characters--I used Ice Queen, Bluesman and a man who couldn't stop clapping. This started as a response to Anthony's prompt last week to write a DMT dream type poem, but I was too late to link. Really enjoyed blending the two. Hope you do too :-)
ha. i think i might be clapping there with the old man....smiles...sounds like a fun jam out in the woods there...except the cut tongue...ouch...ha
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! So happy that you enjoyed this. It was a very fun write, though I have to say that it's original incarnation wasn't as good, Claudia's characters made it much better :-)
DeleteI enjoyed the dram-like tone of your poem, Sara. And the image of that man clapping and clapping will longer with me for a while.
ReplyDeleteHi Gabriella! That character of Claudia's really resonated with me, I saw from many of the poems that he touched other poets too. Thank you:-)
DeleteNow this is one imaginative write!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary! Thank you very much. I really enjoyed yours as well :-)
DeleteA very lovely story that I can see the man clapping at the end ~ A magical melodious post ~
ReplyDeleteHi Grace! Thank you for your lovely words :-)
DeleteI liked the note being sharp - you had me there :)
ReplyDeleteHi BW! That was my starting point. Thank you for sharing in the fun I had with that :-)
Deleteoh i love the word play in the title...and i love when music tastes green...ha - what a cool description
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! Yes, I really enjoyed that line too. Thank you very much :-)
DeleteMusic tasting green.. That's an image that will stay with me.
ReplyDeleteHi Bjorn! Happy that I was able to make an impression :-)
Delete"Willow gave a shimmy shake
ReplyDeleteLeft musical leaf notes
In her wake".........and no wonder green music showered...lovely, lovely imagery...and i love the sun's magic touch to beat the icequeen...
Hi Sumana! Thank you very much, that part about the sun beat, and ice queen was complete serendipity, I was using beat in the musical sense, but I love how you read it! :-)
Deletemusic that tasted green..i liked that a lot:)
ReplyDeleteHi Arathi! Thank you, it one of my favorites too :-)
DeleteThoroughly enjoyable. You took the prompt and had a great time with it. So creative.
ReplyDeleteHi Victoria! Thank you, your poems were outstanding :-)
Deletelovely!! this was so inventive in so many ways!!
ReplyDeleteHi Arushi! Thank you, I had a lot of fun with it :-)
DeleteImaginative fable. The ice queen singing was a nice touch.
ReplyDeleteHi Rallentanda! Thank you, I love fables :-)
Deletehmmm happiness should always be ther
ReplyDeleteHi Vandana! It certainly put me in a happy mood to write this and then all the lovely comments--I'm a bit overwhelmed :-)
DeleteGood idea, aligning it to song. Enjoyed the read.
ReplyDeleteHi Hamish! Thank you very much for the visit and I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
DeleteWonderful write Sara! Where music is invoked it can win lots of support and accolades! Great!
ReplyDeleteHank
Hi Hank! So true, music is our common language and one of the things we remember even when most of our memory is gone (my mother-in-law has Alzheimer's but she still lights up when she hears her favorite songs) bittersweetness
DeleteAs the last commenter implies, I may be a sucker for musically themed poems, but... I really liked this! I think I'm going to try to leave some musical leaf notes in MY wake today. :)
ReplyDeleteThat first line really drew me in. The rest made me glad I stayed. :)
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