Thursday, June 7, 2012

Not What She Sea-ms

Her liquidity is not in question
Nor her panache
The way she flashes light
Back at the sun
Moods that roll in waves
Or crest for the moon
Storms only thrill her
Splash-dancing crashing with thunder
A body that rocks the world
But, 
Never be lulled by her 
Mirror calm or
Turquoise beauty
A mere tectonic scrape 
Of her belly 
And her wrath is tsunamic

From the "water" prompt at poetryjaam.blogspot.com









34 comments:

  1. Sara- Yep, I've met her. This is spot on. I especially like the ending... some great word choices, too!

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    1. Thank you Laurie! I had a lot of fun with this, and the words--love to make things up :-)

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  2. her wrath is tsunamic....ha...there was def some fun word play in this...

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    1. Thank you Brian! glad that you enjoyed it.

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  3. Oh, that ending is spot on! (sadly) But, I do so love the water :)
    This was lovely, some parts made me smile.

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    1. Thank you so much for coming by and I'm glad we shared a smile :-)

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  4. I really like how you personified the sea. Nice play on words in the title and poem. You made water come alive :) great job.

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  5. I thought your post title is cool ~ Well she seems like someone you don't want to cross swords with ~ I like the metaphor use of water here ~ Well done ~

    http://www.everydayamazin.blogspot.ca/2012/06/rainy-day.html

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    1. Thank you Grace, I try to make the titles interesting--glad you liked it. And, yes you should never cross swords with the sea :-)

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  6. It sea-ms you've captured her perfectly, Sara! Excellent! :-)

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    1. Thank you Pam! So glad you stopped by :-)

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  7. Ah yes she can be quite deceptive! Well done.

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  8. Ooooh, I love the way you portray her - especially "her wrath is tsunamic".......

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    1. Thank you Sherry! That was one of my favorite lines too

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  9. Yes, the ending definitely characterizes her. She can be very calm, but she also has that tsunamic side that says, "I am in charge here." I enjoyed this!

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    1. Thank you Mary! That was what I was trying to portray (and have a little fun in the process :-)

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    1. Yes! Thank you for stopping by Willow

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  11. Loooooooove this! I love her! I AM her!
    Perfect, perfect. And this sentence? Fantastic: "Her liquidity is not in question"

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    1. De, thank you soooo much! I thought you might enjoy this--my saltwater friend... That sentence was one of those that just popped into my head--love it when that happens :-)

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  12. From the most clever title through the last words, great poetry!!

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    1. Wow! Thank you very much Helen :-)

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  13. Love this! POV of the ocean itself! Excellent!

    "Moods that roll in waves
    Or crest for the moon
    Storms only thrill her"

    I SO enjoy this, too!

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    1. Hannah! Thank you so much for stopping by :-) and thank you for mentioning your favorite lines, too

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  14. You really went with the power of the water with this one. Love it!

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    1. Judy, thank you for stopping by and so glad you enjoyed it. The power of the ocean has always fascinated me

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  15. ha..this is awesome...great metaphor...and yeah...good to be careful..smiles

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  16. And what a tsunami! Sara, your metaphors are brilliant, your images of water personified to the max! I needed this one. In fact, at one time, I kind of was like this one, but that was before the meds, hee hee hee. Amy

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    1. Amy, you always leave the best comments!
      Thank you :-)

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  17. Oops! Forgot to leave you breadcrumbs, as you do for me! A.
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/06/14/we-interrupt-your-regularly-scheduled-programming/

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!