At first you don't notice
Cells that slip free
Their nuclei of fear
What people think
Sink below your radar
Next soul suckers
Are released
Let those lampreys
Loose you don't have
The juice to make
Everything all better
Anymore
Heart soars
Levity leaves a
Cavity within and
A sprout
Sunflower,tender leaves
Capped in shell
Swells, casts off
Pretention, convention
Protection, shuns the
Darkness
Faces, races and
Embraces
The light
Written for the prompt "Labyrinth " at Think Tank Thursday # 102 Poets United
Cells that slip free
Their nuclei of fear
What people think
Sink below your radar
Next soul suckers
Are released
Let those lampreys
Loose you don't have
The juice to make
Everything all better
Anymore
Heart soars
Levity leaves a
Cavity within and
A sprout
Sunflower,tender leaves
Capped in shell
Swells, casts off
Pretention, convention
Protection, shuns the
Darkness
Faces, races and
Embraces
The light
Written for the prompt "Labyrinth " at Think Tank Thursday # 102 Poets United
Sara, this is brilliant. I particularly love the way you ended it.
ReplyDeleteSara thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this poem.
DeleteA whirling, trance-like spin through directions in chaos! Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by Gemma--love your comments, made me smile.
DeleteI think the internal rhyme adds to the labyrinth concept... fabulous piece, Sara!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Laurie! I didn't even think of that--you always leave such thoughtful comments :-)
Deleteenchanting insight into dark matter!
ReplyDeleteHi Esther! so nice to see you--thank you very much for the comment. I'll be over soon :-)
DeleteInteresting, tres interesting. Provokes thinking as real poetry does. Love it
ReplyDeleteThank you Eda! Really appreciate you stopping by--that is a wonderful compliment :-)
DeleteGreat, as always. Makes me think.
ReplyDeleteLevity leaves a
ReplyDeleteCavity within and
A sprout
Sunflower,tender leaves
Capped in shell
Swells, casts off
Love this portion!!! So much hope in that sprout!! Lots of great inner rhyme flowing through this!! Great poem, Sara!
Thank you Hannah! that was one of my favorite parts too--really appreciate your compliment :-)
DeleteOh, blessing rain upon you for removing the robotic word verification! Hehehe! And you're quite right, I do feel like a bit of a one woman crusader ...care to join me? LOL.
ReplyDeleteBlogger's latest addition of indistinct numbers was the final ignominy!
I'm all for casting off pretension and convention, too, so I enjoyed your oddball rhyme scheme. Thanks. :)
Hi Jinksy! I am not a fan of the verifier so I guess you can count me in.
DeleteGlad you enjoyed the poem, thank you for joining too:-)
for me there is an uncircling into freedom...re-lease...yeah..i like
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia yes, you totally caught my meaning/momentum
DeleteThank you for stopping in. Really enjoying receiving your poetry in my inbox:-)
I could relate to your view~ I love the essence and flow of your words!
ReplyDeleteThis was my fav:
"Levity leaves a
Cavity within and
A sprout
Sunflower,tender leaves
Capped in shell
Swells, casts off"
Beautiful!!!
upon first reading, the words and rhythm did make me feel as if moving outward from the center... faster the closer to freedom... then
ReplyDelete"Faces, races and
Embraces
The light."
Loved the gathering speed and your imagery and the warmth of the ending! Loved the entire poem!
♥
dani