Friday, July 27, 2012

Sound Sleep

Sing me a song
Tuned to bliss
The subtle notes of
Wavelets lapping
On a sailboat keel
So I can rock and sway

In time with drip-drop
Patter on palms
And the see-saw swish-scritch
Of fronds swinging in
Rhythm with a balmy breeze
So I can sway and rock

With the light years of
Crystal whispers
Streaming from the
Infinite sea of space
So I can sway and sleep
Soundly

Written for the prompt to write sound poem for Think Tank Thursday at Poets United poetry blogroll.blogspot.com

26 comments:

  1. Love all the water sounds in this. I'd love to be on a boat where I could here the gentle lapping sound of water around the keel too.
    Lovely capture of the sound prompt Sara. :)

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    1. Thank you so much! Water in pretty much any form is my favorite sound. I even like the crunch of snow:-)

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  2. This is gorgeous! I enjoy falling alseep to pretty music or the sound of ocean waves. It always makes for a more reatful night. :)

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    1. Thank you Rachel! Nice to see you again. The sound of the ocean puts me to sleep too. Wonderful sound:-)

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  3. Sara, This is a song of the sea that I can taste and feel. Well done.

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    1. Thank you Sara! So happy that you enjoyed my song.

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  4. In time with drip-drop
    Patter on palms...LOVE this!!! Such a song this is...beautiful , melodic!!! Well done, Sara!!

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    1. Hannah, you leave the most wonderful enthusiastic comments. You always make me smile. Thank you so much:-)

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  5. you get us swaying and rocking with your gentle voice in this...smiles...very nice...really nice sounds in this...

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    1. Thank you Brian, that was the effect I was trying to convey :-)

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  6. Lovely. That worked just beautifully.

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  7. this makes me wish i didn't live in the desert! really lovely!

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    1. The desert has its own song too. Thank you your kind words:-)

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  8. Ah, this is the song in nature I love most...
    Wonderful to read! Thanks for joining in...
    I really enjoyed it :D

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    1. Hi Ella, nice to see you again! So glad that you enjoyed my take on the prompt. The Think Tank Thursdays have been very creative and fun :-)

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  9. The sway of the palm trees, the lapping of waves against the boat... so meditative. I really like the sea metaphor here, Sara... especially:

    Crystal whispers
    Streaming from the
    Infinite sea of space

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    1. Laurie, thank you so much for the wonderful compliment! I'm really happy that everyone felt the peacefulness I was hoping to pen. And "Crystal whispers" was one of my favorites too :-) Really been enjoying your poems--emotion, imagery and perfect endings!

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  10. Oh, my. This is amazing, Sara. My two weeks in Tahoe included lots of kayaking, so this actually literally makes my heart ache a little bit. Just fantastic.

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    1. De, I'm so glad that you had so much time with "your lake" :-)
      You have written so many gems from that big blue water. Really appreciate your encouragement and high praise--you and Laurie made my day!

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  11. so peaceful...the sea sings the most beautiful lullabies and you captured it so well..

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    1. Thank you Claudia! That is quite a poetic compliment, I'm a huge fan of lullabies :-)

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  12. Sara, from the literal sounds of palm fronds to the "light years of crystal whispers," I could hear this whole poem before I read the prompt! Lovely write, and I wish I could be sung to sleep by this melody... Peace, Amy

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    1. Thank you Amy! You always leave the most thoughtful compliments. Love hearing from you.

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!