Monday, February 18, 2013

Where The Heart Is


The pink hibiscus tree
Was so small
And now it's not
There
At all
Instead brick
That glows in
Pink time
Painted on the
Pavers and pond
Spread by setting sun
So thick feels
Like you can breathe
It in
Star gazing
Fish catching
Friends laughing
Watching
Trees and children
Grow towards the sky
Or just the wind
Shaping smiles on the pond
Dorothy had it right
Home is Oz-some

Okay, so she didn't say that :-)  Was in my head when I woke up this morning and it made me laugh, hope you get a grin from it too. 25 years in one place, nearly all of it renovated by now (except that one bathroom off the kitchen...). Love looking out the kitchen window at the pond (photo is my view).  We were married here, tons of kid birthdays, etc. Lots of memories, and 3 hurricanes where the landscape was debris, and not so pretty.  Mary at dversepoets, dversepoets.com asked us to describe one of our favorite places and this is definitely one of mine. Also shared with my friends at Poets United Poetry Pantry, poertryroll.blogspot.com.

39 comments:

  1. Sounds like a lovely home with lots of memories... and you have a gorgeous view, too.

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    1. Hi Laurie!! It is pretty well packed to the roof with memories :-) Thank you

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  2. What a beautiful sense of place, Sara. Wonderful details that you share really make me able to picture it. I love 'home is Oz-some.'

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    1. Hi Mary!! That is the best compliment you could give me--thank you very much :-)

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  3. ...what a wonderful place that reminds me of so many things as well... i am enjoying the greenery there and the serenity of the place as how it looks to be... just loved the notion of wind shaping smiles on the pond... i can picture that well... great li'l piece... smiles...

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    1. Hi Kelvin!! Greenery is wonderful, very soothing. Thank you for noticing the wind shaping smiles, I played around with that for a while before it was what I wanted. :-)

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  4. Perfect, Sara.
    Love "Oz-some." ;)

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    1. Hi De!! It's always so nice to see you. Thank you very much :-)

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  5. Home is definitely where the heart is Sara. Really liked your description of home. Lovely piece of writing. David.

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    1. Hi David!! Glad that you share my sense of home and thank you for wonderful compliment :-)

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  6. LOL! I wasn't expecting that punchline. :)

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    1. Hi Mad!! Love to give surprise endings! Thank you:-)

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  7. "Pink time" is a great line...

    "Wind shaping smiles on the pond" is a fantastic visual/concept.

    An uplifting read, well done.

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    1. Hi Jack!! So glad you enjoyed this, pink time is our favorite time, usually greeted with a glass of wine ;-)

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  8. oz-some...LOVE it...ha....and...Trees and children
    Grow towards the sky...that's how it should be...nice, nice, nice..love the pink time as well

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    1. Hi Claudia!! thought you might like that line about trees and children :-) Always good to see you!

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  9. Plant another tree. Trees are most worthy investments.

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    1. Hi Charleen!! Welcome :-) You are absolutely right, and we did plant more trees--about 20. We completely redid the whole yard and put in more planter areas with lots of trees :-) (and flowers and ginger, and bamboo, and orchids!)

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  10. there is no place like home...even when we remake it a bit and change it up..give it a fresh face...easy to remember it like it was though...smiles..

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    1. Hi Brian--definitely, though if I have to live through any more renovations, I'm moving!! :-) Thank you for the smiles

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  11. It's wonderful to have strong roots and memories tucked inside every corner of a home. This was lovely.

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    1. Hi and Welcome!! I do love roots and memories. So glad you enjoyed your visit. Thank you :-)

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  12. Nice, Sara...there is no place like home :)Lovely!

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    1. Hi Ayala!! There is no place like home :-)

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  13. Lovely view Sara ~ Home is where those memories reside...oz-some indeed ~

    Grace

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    1. Hi Grace!! Thank you, really loved your poem today :-)

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  14. haha I'm a sucker for Wordplay so that last line is utter GOLD! Well written all around as well! Thanks for sharing =D

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    1. Hi Addie!! Welcome :-) and thank you so much for making my day! I do love wordplay too, looking forward to visiting your poetry

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  15. Ha! That did make me smile :-) Lovely...

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    1. Hi Jennifer!! I'm so glad it did--thank you for stopping by for a smile :-)

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  16. Home sweet home..This was Oz-some ..loved it..

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    1. Hi and Welcome!! Thank you so much for the visit and the compliment :-)

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  17. Lots of poetic suprises in this :-) One style thing which might help - you start each line with a capital/upper case letter, which at times interrupts the flow of your words, which is a shame, becauase they flow so well. As an example:

    "The pink hibiscus tree
    Was so small
    And now it's not
    There
    At all"

    works better like this, in my opinion:

    The pink hibiscus tree
    was so small
    and now it's not
    there
    at all"

    Maybe I'm being picky - and you can do with my advice as you will :-)

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  18. Hi Tony!! So nice to see you again and I really appreciate that observation--my style is to use the caps at the beginning of each line, however I really like it without-- so thank you very much! :-)

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  19. I got a grin. Your poem was original and the last line was a killer. Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

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    1. Hi Cuban!! Always happy to share grins :-) Thank you very much!

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  20. Lovely - and we don't know for sure that she didn't say it... it just didn't get recorded!

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    1. Hi Dave!! I love your comment, gave me a smile and laugh with my coffee this morning :-) Thank you!

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  21. i like the wind shaping smiles on the pond

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!