Perhaps I felt
The fractures
Fault-rumble
And when he
Got that job offer
Three thousand miles
From everything/one
I loved
Closed my eyes
And leapt
Tried to
Keep together
But not enough
Of me survived
The trip
This is tale of sacrifice for
commitment-my naïve move to Florida from the Golden State of
California, for my then husband, thinking things would be fine—left
best job, best friends, best weather for worst job, no friends and
awful weather. But I stayed, because I did eventually find
love...(and a good job and good friends...) offered up for the prompt
of Sacrifice at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com, Laurie's first
night (yay Laurie!) and for prompt of Committed at Poets United (yay
Kim!) (felt like I should be committed after I moved to FL)
poetryblogroll.blogspot.com and also shared with OLN at
dversepoets.com where we are all committed to sharing :-)
The things we do for love, eh? At least you found Mr. Right!
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie!! Yep, sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't. Still feel a little twinge of sacrifice that I'm living 3000 miles from my family, but when I look at my husband and my kids-totally worth it:-)
DeleteSara, I like the honesty in your poem. Sometimes SACRIFICES are very hard...when you are called to give up so much that is familiar and good in your life. I am glad all worked out in the end, despite the rough patches!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary!! Thank you--I tried to weave in a happy ending but the poem lost it's impact, bothered me though, I like to leave a smile :-)
Deletenice...not an easy decision you know...one best made together as you are both in it...i rather like florida though and miss it from when we lived there....those are def some of the sacrifices...
ReplyDeleteHi Brian!! So true, it was a complex situation for me a lot of fear he'd have regrets for missing the opportunity, etc. Also had never lived anywhere but CA and thought everywhere was the same Ha!! I have come to love Florida :-)
DeleteI have made such hopeful and diverted journeys myself. Now I stay home! hee hee. Great write, kiddo.
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry!! I thought you might have shared this kind of journey :-) Home is a nice place to be-- Loved your poem.
Deletethe way you divide up the lines really emphasizes the fractured feeling of your move - nice
ReplyDeleteHi Steven!! Nice to see you:-) I have fun fracturing lines, thank you for noticing
DeleteGlad things worked out for you in the end.
ReplyDeleteHi! Welcome!! And thank you so much for the good wishes :-)
DeleteLike you, I know the sacrifice of moving and commitment to family ~
ReplyDeleteSo glad to read that things worked out eventually for you ~
Cheers for your commitment to the poetry communities around ~
Hi Grace!! Sorry that you have had to move too, though happy that you have family worth that sacrifice :-)
DeleteI'd like to have more of a commitment to these wonderful communities-imaginary toads is on my list, but you know how it is..there's only so much time in the day--gotta make sacrifices;-)
Love the honesty of your post and glad that things turned out for the best :)
ReplyDeleteHi ND!! Thank you, me too :-):
DeleteWell, every cloud has a silver lining. I sympathise with your ealier plight, but I'm pleased that in the end you got what you wanted. Happy Valentine's!
ReplyDeleteGreetings from London.
Hi Cuban! You just never know how things will turn out-if someone would have told me 20 years ago that I'd end up living in Florida I would have laughed myself silly :-)
DeleteHappened to me too ... from Missouri to Minnesota. We didn't survive. Great write!
ReplyDeleteHi Helen!! That was about as extreme as mine-we seem to have a lot of shared journeys :-)
DeleteEnjoyed your poem! I like the name of your blog, too :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Tabatha!! Welcome :-) Thank you for the visit and kind words! Look forward to visiting you
Deletei guess it's called live and learn
ReplyDeletejourney with a new friend
Hi Z! Welcome :-) That is definitely what it is called--life lessons, really appreciate the visit and the comment!
DeleteGreat example of a sacrifice being worth the cost. Happy you are happy! :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Jennifer!! Eventually it all works out. Thank you :-)
DeleteYou clearly, concisely tell the tale of what must have been a great challenge. Your brevity makes the piece stronger. Well done! (And so happy you found true love. That move was a necessary leg of the journey to that love, I suppose.)
ReplyDeleteKim, Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments, really appreciate the support on how I wrote the poem, too. As they say, things happen for a reason, right? :-)
DeleteThis poem states a situation very well--I especially like the ending. I am glad you were eventually able to make peace with your new location.
ReplyDeleteHi Peggy!! Thank you, I didn't want to get too melodramatic :-) I'm very glad too, finding love here was a real blessing.
Deletenicely done and thanks for sharing words
ReplyDeleteHi Wayne!! Welcome :-) Really enjoying sharing words with everyone, looking forward to visiting your blog.
DeleteYes, the poem has the smack of reality about it. Life has funny way both of rewarding and punishing -- irrespective of our merits. Thanks for this.
ReplyDeleteHi Dave!! Excellent way to describe life, didn't think of it that way--yet it's very true. Thank you!
DeleteWe always end up where we are supposed to be, even if it seems like the worse end of the stick sometimes. Great poem. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rachel!! You definitely nailed it--right when you think you're going to get rained out, the sun peeks through :-) Thank you!
Deleteglad your journey has found a new happiness
ReplyDeleteHi Lucy!! Welcome :-) you have one of my favorite names! I'm happy with my journey too, you just never know, right?
DeleteGlad it all came right in the end. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Rosemary!! So nice to see you :-) I really loved your poem, thank you so much for your kind words.
Delete...hi Sara... sorry a bit late at your lair... smiles... i think after all it's best to say Love wins... sometimes the sacrifices we do / take in life leads to brighter possibilities & greater good as it seemed in your case...and i am happy for you... very difficult to left friends, family , memories... but no... you just left 'em & not totally abandoned...and you could always look back...have visits... drop calls... anything to savor the memories of those you left behind... wonderful take on the prompt and brightest blessings to you & yours... smiles...
ReplyDeleteHi Kelvin!! Your words are definitely worth the wait:-) and so very true, I savor the memories and the Christmas cards we share each year. Thank you very much for the kind words and good wishes!
DeleteYou relate so well feelings and truth about the great sacrifice of place for love. We don't know what we are giving up until we go. Thing is we often find we have built up our lost place, too. The love keeps growing like the love for someone who dies.
ReplyDeleteHi Judy! Wonderful to see you again :-) I'm very touched by your compliment, thank you very much!
DeleteI really liked that one. Well done!
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