The love tide shifts
In her heart
Sadness draws
The liquid down
Only to be replenished by
~Teardrops skating on a moonbeam~
Gleam in his eyes
Victory was bitter
Tired of lessons repeated
Now armed with love
He reaches across the divide
This is offered for Laurie's prompt at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com to write about a bridge, using the Puente form of poetry. The 1st and 3rd stanzas are supposed to be different thoughts, I went more with different views...look forward to crossing more bridges tonight :-)
This is great, Sara... love the 2nd stanza. I'm so glad you liked the prompt.
ReplyDeleteHi Laurie! Thank you. That was my favorite part too :-)
DeleteOoooooh I love this ... especially the bridge line!!!
ReplyDeleteHi Helen! Thank you! I love bridges, especially in music and poetry :-)
DeleteThose teadrops didn't go to waste, clearly! Thanks for stopping by by blog
ReplyDeleteMuch love...
Hi Gillena! Thank you! I loved your take on the Puente :-)
Deletegreat turn line in the middle...and hope you cross those bridges this evening as you think...def divides that need to be crossed...and that is a good thing when we do...
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! Enjoyed all the takes on the bridge at PJ. And it did feel much better when we bridged the divide ;-)
Deletelove the mood shift and the divider line that truly bridged the gap...a sweet write...
ReplyDeleteHi Sumana! Thank you, I'm glad you felt like the bridge held up on both sides :-)
DeleteNo matter what ever one conquers in the end only love will matter.
ReplyDeleteHi Vandana! Yes, that's my belief too :-)
DeleteI enjoyed the positive feelings at the end, how love can strengthen and empower us to reach out.
ReplyDeleteHi Gabriella! I love how people see things that I don't--I was kind of playing with words using "armed" but you're right, it's strengthening too! Thank you:-)
Deletethat is a welcome shift, I'm sure.
ReplyDeletebeautifully presented.
Hi Johanna! Always a welcome shift, thank you! :-)
DeleteSorry autocorrect... Jo-hanna
Deletewhat's a hyphen between friends :-)
Deletea bridge?
Jo-hanna, love your humor :-)
DeleteBest to bridge a love divide as quickly as possible... the chasms can grow and the bridge many not reach.
ReplyDeleteHi Donna! That is the truth. Thank you for that wisdom :-)
DeleteI really liked " Teardrops skating on a moonbeam " which could actually launch into an entirely new poem if you ever were at a loss some day. Smiles. I too like the idea of love reaching across the divide. That is the best kind of love that can accomplish that!
ReplyDeleteHi Mary! That is a great idea!! It does kind of beg to be used again :-). Thank you
Deleteoh it is good to reach across the divide... victory is bitter indeed... when it comes to love there should be only winners
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia! Yes it isn't always easy but definitely worth it :-)
Deletelove this -- beautiful example of the bridge form; gorgeous second stanza :)
ReplyDeleteHi! Thank you for the kind words :-)
DeleteVery well done bridge poem. This has been a new form to me this week and I have liked seeing how different writers handle it. thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteHi Peggy! Thank you. I enjoyed the form and like you I really enjoyed the poems from everyone :-)
Delete~Teardrops skating on a moonbeam~ Wow!!! What a bridge. Wonderful connection between the 1st and 3rd stanzas: him and then her, with the shared bridge - perfect Puente subject matter. Really, an elegant well-crafted piece!
ReplyDeleteHi Wendy! You always have such wonderful comments and enthusiasm. I really appreciate both :-)
DeleteTeardrops skating on a moonbeam is a such a vivid bridge -- !
ReplyDeleteso well-written. :)