Wednesday, June 18, 2014

Shifting Tides

The love tide shifts
In her heart
Sadness draws
The liquid down
Only to be replenished by

~Teardrops skating on a moonbeam~

Gleam in his eyes
Victory was bitter
Tired of lessons repeated
Now armed with love
He reaches across the divide

This is offered for Laurie's prompt at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com to write about a bridge, using the Puente form of poetry.  The 1st and 3rd stanzas are supposed to be different thoughts, I went more with different views...look forward to crossing more bridges tonight :-)

32 comments:

  1. This is great, Sara... love the 2nd stanza. I'm so glad you liked the prompt.

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    1. Hi Laurie! Thank you. That was my favorite part too :-)

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  2. Ooooooh I love this ... especially the bridge line!!!

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    1. Hi Helen! Thank you! I love bridges, especially in music and poetry :-)

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  3. Those teadrops didn't go to waste, clearly! Thanks for stopping by by blog

    Much love...

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    1. Hi Gillena! Thank you! I loved your take on the Puente :-)

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  4. great turn line in the middle...and hope you cross those bridges this evening as you think...def divides that need to be crossed...and that is a good thing when we do...

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    1. Hi Brian! Enjoyed all the takes on the bridge at PJ. And it did feel much better when we bridged the divide ;-)

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  5. love the mood shift and the divider line that truly bridged the gap...a sweet write...

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    1. Hi Sumana! Thank you, I'm glad you felt like the bridge held up on both sides :-)

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  6. No matter what ever one conquers in the end only love will matter.

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    1. Hi Vandana! Yes, that's my belief too :-)

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  7. I enjoyed the positive feelings at the end, how love can strengthen and empower us to reach out.

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    1. Hi Gabriella! I love how people see things that I don't--I was kind of playing with words using "armed" but you're right, it's strengthening too! Thank you:-)

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  8. that is a welcome shift, I'm sure.
    beautifully presented.

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    1. Hi Johanna! Always a welcome shift, thank you! :-)

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    2. Sorry autocorrect... Jo-hanna

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    3. what's a hyphen between friends :-)
      a bridge?

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    4. Jo-hanna, love your humor :-)

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  9. Best to bridge a love divide as quickly as possible... the chasms can grow and the bridge many not reach.

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    1. Hi Donna! That is the truth. Thank you for that wisdom :-)

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  10. I really liked " Teardrops skating on a moonbeam " which could actually launch into an entirely new poem if you ever were at a loss some day. Smiles. I too like the idea of love reaching across the divide. That is the best kind of love that can accomplish that!

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    1. Hi Mary! That is a great idea!! It does kind of beg to be used again :-). Thank you

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  11. oh it is good to reach across the divide... victory is bitter indeed... when it comes to love there should be only winners

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    1. Hi Claudia! Yes it isn't always easy but definitely worth it :-)

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  12. love this -- beautiful example of the bridge form; gorgeous second stanza :)

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    1. Hi! Thank you for the kind words :-)

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  13. Very well done bridge poem. This has been a new form to me this week and I have liked seeing how different writers handle it. thanks for sharing

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    1. Hi Peggy! Thank you. I enjoyed the form and like you I really enjoyed the poems from everyone :-)

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  14. ~Teardrops skating on a moonbeam~ Wow!!! What a bridge. Wonderful connection between the 1st and 3rd stanzas: him and then her, with the shared bridge - perfect Puente subject matter. Really, an elegant well-crafted piece!

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    1. Hi Wendy! You always have such wonderful comments and enthusiasm. I really appreciate both :-)

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  15. Teardrops skating on a moonbeam is a such a vivid bridge -- !
    so well-written. :)

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!