Saturday, June 23, 2012

Re-lease

At first you don't notice
Cells that slip free
Their nuclei of fear
What people think
Sink below your radar
Next soul suckers
Are released
Let those lampreys
Loose you don't have
The juice to make
Everything all better
Anymore
Heart soars
Levity leaves a
Cavity within and
A sprout
Sunflower,tender leaves
Capped in shell
Swells, casts off
Pretention, convention
Protection, shuns the
Darkness
Faces, races and
Embraces
The light


Written for the prompt "Labyrinth " at Think Tank Thursday # 102 Poets United

19 comments:

  1. Sara, this is brilliant. I particularly love the way you ended it.

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    1. Sara thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this poem.

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  2. A whirling, trance-like spin through directions in chaos! Wonderful!

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    1. Thank you for stopping by Gemma--love your comments, made me smile.

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  3. I think the internal rhyme adds to the labyrinth concept... fabulous piece, Sara!

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    1. Thank you so much Laurie! I didn't even think of that--you always leave such thoughtful comments :-)

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  4. enchanting insight into dark matter!

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    1. Hi Esther! so nice to see you--thank you very much for the comment. I'll be over soon :-)

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  5. Interesting, tres interesting. Provokes thinking as real poetry does. Love it

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    1. Thank you Eda! Really appreciate you stopping by--that is a wonderful compliment :-)

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  6. Great, as always. Makes me think.

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  7. Levity leaves a
    Cavity within and
    A sprout
    Sunflower,tender leaves
    Capped in shell
    Swells, casts off


    Love this portion!!! So much hope in that sprout!! Lots of great inner rhyme flowing through this!! Great poem, Sara!

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    1. Thank you Hannah! that was one of my favorite parts too--really appreciate your compliment :-)

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  8. Oh, blessing rain upon you for removing the robotic word verification! Hehehe! And you're quite right, I do feel like a bit of a one woman crusader ...care to join me? LOL.
    Blogger's latest addition of indistinct numbers was the final ignominy!
    I'm all for casting off pretension and convention, too, so I enjoyed your oddball rhyme scheme. Thanks. :)

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    1. Hi Jinksy! I am not a fan of the verifier so I guess you can count me in.
      Glad you enjoyed the poem, thank you for joining too:-)

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  9. for me there is an uncircling into freedom...re-lease...yeah..i like

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    1. Hi Claudia yes, you totally caught my meaning/momentum
      Thank you for stopping in. Really enjoying receiving your poetry in my inbox:-)

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  10. I could relate to your view~ I love the essence and flow of your words!
    This was my fav:
    "Levity leaves a
    Cavity within and
    A sprout
    Sunflower,tender leaves
    Capped in shell
    Swells, casts off"

    Beautiful!!!

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  11. upon first reading, the words and rhythm did make me feel as if moving outward from the center... faster the closer to freedom... then
    "Faces, races and
    Embraces
    The light."

    Loved the gathering speed and your imagery and the warmth of the ending! Loved the entire poem!

    dani

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!