Wednesday, November 7, 2012

Just Beneath Reality

The sea is the color of bliss
Trees greet you with a kiss
The ground is as soft as drowsy
There's no such word as “lousy”
Mosquitoes, no-seeums and houseflies
Sing harmony in violet skies
Stars play seek and hide
Every time you go outside
You can be any shape you choose
And calories help you lose
Peace rains every day
Children laugh and parents play
While the highest priority
Belongs to words in poetry


Seasonal Humor

The little boy said,
“Daddy, I don't want to put my coat on.”
Dad pointed at the gray clouds outside and replied gently,
“You see son, it's winter out side and for every season there is a change.”

Two poems offered up today, one decidedly lame humor, however, sometimes I have to go where the pun goddess points me—for “Change of Seasons” at Poetry Jam poetryjaam.blogspot.com--Peggy's beautiful photos deserve better.  Love that shot of Hawaii and California!  And, Day 4 of Poem a day challenge at Poetic Asides, the lovely, talented and warm Marie Elena asks us to write a poem using the phrase "Just beneath ________"  Though I have to give some credit to Lewis Carroll and  S.E. Ingraham--I've always loved "Jabberwocky" and Sharon wrote a really cool fantasy poem at http://www.pyrokinection.com, got my jabber juices going...
And for the dverse poets at the bar for Open Link Night, where jabbering is welcome :-)  dversepoets.com

31 comments:

  1. smiles...just coming from the full moon you know...i like the mosquitoes, and houseflies singing harmony in violet skies...smiles

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    1. Hi Claudia!! So glad you enjoyed this--it was a fun write :-)

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  2. I hate mosquito's and noseeums... so allergic to so many of the bugs here.
    Two very nice pieces Sara :)

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    1. Hi Brenda!! You're so generous--I really hate the noseeums especially, I look like I'm starting a new trend--red polka dotted legs--it was fun to give them a positive spin :-)

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  3. I enjoyed both your poems despite the pun goddess. I thought the first poem an excellent ode to summer! Thanks for taking on my seasons prompt!

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    1. Hi Peggy!! Thank you so much for accepting my pun--and I love the idea of an ode to summer, excellent!! :-)

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  4. This was so enjoyable and lovely ... thanks for making me smile :-)

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    1. Any time, I'm so glad you enjoyed it and especially that it made you smile--that is the best! :-)

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  5. Peace rains every day - such a great line! I'll grab my umbrella for this kind of day!

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    1. Hi Robyn!! Welcome! I liked that line too--wish it was true :-) Would be fun to splash in peace puddles wouldn't it?

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  6. haha yes you must follow the pun juices flow...lol...int eh first...everything adds a little bit to the song you know...

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    1. Hi Brian--always glad to see you--and thank you for laughing, much appreciated :-)

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  7. I love the idea of peace raining every day and also of parents playing! Why not! A wistful poem today, Sara.

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    1. Hi Mary!! Parents should get to play more often :-) Thank you for stopping over to play.

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  8. I love these Sara... especially the first. Great combination of lots of prompts.

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    1. Hi Laurie!! Thank you, the first was a real poem, the second, not so much--glad that you enjoyed them :-)

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  9. I love the first, so whimsical and a bit surreal, nicely written! :)

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    1. Hi Loredana!! Nice to see you--really enjoyed your photos and poems, thank you for stopping by :-)

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  10. really very good. Both are nicely done. Thanks for sharing these.

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    1. Hi Fred!! You are too kind, thank you so much. Looking forward to seeing what new poems and paintings you have created :-)

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  11. I enjoyed both poems. Somehow you even pulled off line four in the first poem. I don't know how you did it, normally a line like that would have jarred on me, but somehow you did it, so I have to say I'm full of admiration -- for the blog in general, too. Fresh and different.

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    1. Hi Dave!! Thank you so much for your generous praise. You have a keen eye, I almost took out the fourth line, definitely played with it for awhile because it wasn't really part of the scene I was creating. Very happy that it didn't jar you:-) Really loved that art show poem, been to lots of art shows and you captured it perfectly. And your comment about my blog just made my day!!

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  12. Love this line .... 'Stars play seek and hide every time you go outside' ~~ We have wide open spaces, clear skies .... bright starry nights out here where I live.

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  13. Hi Helen!! I love the stars in those wide open spaces--and the idea of being able to see them all the time, made me smile, so I added that little detail--glad that you enjoyed it and so happy that you have wide open spaces with lots of stars :-)

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  14. what a lovely reality that would be!

    and thank you for joining in at Poetry Jam! there's nothing wrong with humor!


    dani

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  15. Love that first poem. I wish it was reality! :-)

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  16. Love that first poem. I wish it was reality! :-)

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  17. Love your "highest priority," Sara. We need all the beauty we can get in this world. Peace, Amy

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  18. Capturing sweet moments of the greatness in ordinary days. :)

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  19. I enjoyed that gentle wistfulness of the first poem and the humor of the second. Great job with these, Sara!

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  20. My son doesn't like coats yet... Fall isn't cold enough yet, I guess. BUT he does love to wear his yellow rain boots all the time :)

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!