Wednesday, April 3, 2013

Light Hunting

The sun creeps
Up
Silent
On kitten toes
Stalks
The darkness
Spooks and
Spills a ray
Along the horizon
Waits for songbirds
To ease solitude
Then leaps
Into the pines


Day three (Whee!) of Poetic Asides--writing a tentative poem.  Several false starts, but I think this one is fun :-)  Just for grins, I'm sharing with Poets United, where Kim has offered up "body" never thought about so many types--and since I used a kitten analogy to em-body the sun, I'm sharing there too poetryblogroll.blogspot.com

27 comments:

  1. Sara, I do like the idea of the sun creeping on kitten toes. Very valid comparison really!

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  2. Hi Mary!! It always seems that way to me, sunrise is a slow--tentative process, and I love it that way:-) thank you!

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  3. Lovely swerving from sun to kitten and back again. Just as well the sun doesn't gobble up the songbirds. I'm glad to read somebody else is having false starts :-)

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    1. Hi Aprille!! Thank you so much! I could never have the songbirds gobbled up, I love them too much ;-) And I always have several false starts--part of the process...

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  4. absolutely beautiful...reminds me of the carl sandberg poem a bit, but different...i like the sun as a cat...spilling a little light...ha....cool...

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    1. Hi Brian!! Thank you for that reference, I felt a familiarity with the paws, but wasn't sure--I love that poem! Kittens are both rambunctious and tentative so I wanted to play with that...

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  5. nice - love the image of kitten toes - so cool

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    1. Hi!! Thank you so much for the visit, I loved that image too :-)

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  6. The sun on kitten toes is a great image - doubly warming!

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    1. Hi! Your comment really made me laugh--loved it, thank you :-)

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  7. Great poem, love the tone and the voice.

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    1. Hi Dave!! Thank you very much--nice to share with you.

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  8. Love your description of sunrise. A lovely piece.

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    1. Hi Lisa!! Welcome :-) I love sunrise, such a peaceful time--thank you so much for your kind words!

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  9. Sara,

    I enjoyed the foray with nature...of course, the image of kitten toes was delightful:)

    Eileen:)

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    1. Hi Eileen!! Thank you--nature is one of my favorite places to be:-)

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  10. oh nice...i much love the image of the sun, leaping into the pines...very cool and playful

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    1. Hi Claudia!! The ending took me awhile, I was trying not to sound too cliche with clouds or sky, then I thought where do cats like to go? So glad you enjoyed it:-)

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  11. Is there anything cuter than kitten toes? (Just sayin')

    Your characterization of the sun as playfully zapping around, such fun.

    I do think you need to take the "anonymous" option out of your comments, because that Pizza Guy up there has obviously not read your poem!!! Love, Am

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    1. Hi Amy, yes little toes of any sort are pretty adorable, :-) My comments settings don't let me block Anonymous, and I really hate to put a captcha on here.

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  12. A great description of the morning. I really like the "waits for songbirds to ease solitude", especially as I listen to chirping just outside my door!

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    1. Hi Robyn!! Great to see you :-) That was a line that I liked to give the poem a bit of a beat and place--thank you for noticing!

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  13. I love the way you have em-bodied the sun! Lovely poem.

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  14. Hi Sara!! Thank you so much for the visit and kind words, always good to see you :-)

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    1. Hi De!! So glad you enjoyed this. Love all that you've been writing too :-)

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  16. Had to some back to this one, this morning. Those kitten toes wooed me back. :)

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Your words are wonderful! Thanks for popping in--I'll be over in a snap!